Hey Sam! I enjoyed reading your introduction. I think it was a very good way of introducing the Phoenix for your Storybook project. The crossover between Egypt and Greece is very interesting and creative! How “old” is Zeus in this story? You mention in the author’s note that he may be pretty early in his leadership of the Olympians, and I think that would be a great detail to include early in your story to provide a reason why Greece would cast him out. I also wonder if you can make the months-long time gap where Zeus is in Egypt feel less quick. It was a bit jolting for Poseidon to suddenly appear. Maybe you can spend a paragraph describing some of the things Zeus learns and does while he’s in Egypt before Poseidon comes. I’m really excited to see what other stories you tell with the Phoenix! Keep up the good work!
This was a great introduction! I really enjoyed the way that you connected Greek and Egyptian mythology. I think that it is very clever and creative. Finding the phoenix/Bennu as the avenue to connect the two mythology stories is really neat! I like the way that you made the emotions be known of the characters in the story. The description that you used adds a lot to the story. As a reader, I am able to picture exactly what you are writing due to the descriptions that you included. At the beginning of your story, Zeus is kicked out of Greece. What exactly did Zeus do? What if you added a brief history of all of the bad things that Zeus has done to Greece? This would create a better understand right from the beginning of why the Greeks wanted to kick out their ruler. Adding this would also show how desperate the people are for Zeus to come back towards the end of the story. It all ties in together! Also, what if you tried to expand the paragraphs some? I know that there is a lot of dialogue throughout the story, but creating larger paragraphs will make the story not feel as choppy. I look forward to reading more of your stories this semester!
Hello there Sam! You really found a way to pack your story with a punch right off the bat. I love a good Greek story that adds in a lot of mythological lore based creatures. The Author's Notes also helped me to understand where you were coming from at the beginning of the introduction. I was wondering what Zeus did to cause all of the people of Greece to attempt to cast him out. Was it something that just he did or did all the gods take part? Was he on mortal grounds speaking with everyone? Did they pray to him to leave and he left without them knowing or realizing it? You could really liven up the story and provide deeper drama if you hit the potential questions in the beginning! I also appreciate the large amounts of dialogue to break up the characters as you move forward. Everyone has their own minds and you're left to guess as the reader on what's going to happen next. I can't wait to read more from you!
Hey Sammie! I really liked the way that you intertwined both Greek and Egyptian Mythology. Rather than keeping them separate, you let Zeus, Poseidon, Ammon, and Bennu all coexist together, which, in my personal opinion, opens the door to a lot of possibilities. I also really enjoyed the fact that this story was a sort of "redemption story" for Zeus. He is usually hailed as the leader of the gods, but at the same time, he is also a very violent god. It's interesting to implement the Egyptian Bennu and transition it to the idea of the Greek Phoenix. I think a good idea would be to move the images somewhere so that it doesn't distract away from the flow of the story. I also like that the images are embedded inside the story, so that there's more imagery, so maybe making the images smaller would be a viable option. I'm excited to see what happens next in the story.
Hi Sam! Great introduction! I thought this was a great setup for your stories. In my opinion it may have been a little long for an introduction. It felt more like a story itself. If possible I would try to cut out any unnecessary information. I agree with Nathaniel that the pictures do mess with the flow a little bit. Maybe make them smaller or add them to the side versus right in the middle. I almost thought the story was over after the first image because it seemed like an ending image. I liked that Zeus had a different story in this scenario and that he was not the almighty god zeus. I also liked that you combined Greek and Egyptian! It makes stories that many of us have read before very different and exciting! I am excited to see how Zeus handles this situation! Great job on your story so far!
Hi Sam! Your storybook idea is so unique. What a great idea to combine the Greek and Egyptian mythology like that. I have never seen those two mythologies combined before. In your introduction maybe go into more detail about why they have decided to kick Zeus out of Greece. It must have been really bad for the people to rise up against a god. Also, I really liked the plot about Zeus learning from Ammon and the Bennu. But we didn’t get to see very much of his journey. It might be interesting to see how Zeus changes from someone who gets kicked out of a country to someone who saves that country. I thought the pictures you chose for the Battle for Greece worked very well. Writing action scenes, especially fight scenes, can be really challenging. However, I thought you wrote the fight scenes very well. I really enjoyed your storybook so far, and I can’t wait to see where it goes.
Your introduction and your first story the " The Battler for Greece" is a great start to your project page! Both of these stories are easy to read and interesting. I do not have much knowledge of Egyptian Mythology but you definitely made me interested in learning more about it. In your introduction, I was able to feel and picture the anger Zesus felt towards Cronus and his father. I also think more people in our class should adapt to what you did in your authors note for, "The Battle for Greece". You put definitions in the authors note! That is a great idea, especially if the audience is not completely familiar with the topic being discussed. I disagree with the comments above. When it comes to the placement of the pictures. I think it helps create a visual along the way of the story. It is definitely a preference but I do not think you should change that technique. Good job on the profile you have created so far.
Hello Sam, I thought your story “Tales of the Phoenix” was really great! I have always loved reading about Greek mythology and different variants of it, so when I got to read your story I was really excited. I thought that the way you described the fight between Zeus and Cronus was really great. The detail that you put into it really drew me in and made me connected to the story. I thought it was really cool how you had Zeus learn from the phoenix about being reborn and coming back stronger than before. It was a really cool way to introduce the phoenix. For your portfolio, I think that it is set up rally well with great pictures and explanations. The one thing that I would suggest is to add a link to the comment wall in your cover page and in each story page that way people can go directly to it and comment about your stories. Overall I thought your story was great, keep up the good work!
Hey Sam! I like how you chose to write about Greek mythology. Your introduction does a good job of introducing what your storybook is about without giving away too much. The picture on your first story is great! It is very bold. Your dialogue is written well too, it gives the character personalities and adds life to the story. That has always been the hardest part about story writing for me. The only thing I would change is maybe have different header photos for each page to change it up a little bit. Either way your story book is looking really great.
Hi Sam, I really enjoyed reading your story The Battle for Greece. It is an action-packed story that effortlessly keeps the reader’s attention. I think you story is written well and flows very smoothly. I especially like how you have a third person narrator but you also include direct quotes from the characters. I like this dynamic! I also like how it clearly ties into and relates to your introduction. I think the picture you chose for this story is spot on! I think adding the phoenix to your story was a great idea. The analogy between Zeus and the Phoenix is great. Also, your author’s note is extremely helpful. I think you do a great job of explaining (and accomplishing) your goals for this story. Additionally, the second paragraph of the author’s note provides a great summary of the history behind this story. As someone who is not as familiar with Greek mythology, this helped immensely being able to read about the back story. Great job!
Hi Sam! I read the story The Battle for Greece from your storybook. The story was very engaging and I enjoyed reading it. I particularly liked how you wrote the fight scene between Zeus and Cronus. You included a good amount of detail in it, which made it easy for me to visualize the fight while reading. I think the image you used for the story was also very helpful in giving a starting place for what to imagine the fight scene looking like. I liked the idea relating to the phoenix that was expressed further in this story, carrying on from the information provided in your storybook’s Introduction. It was very easy to tell that Zeus was made out to be going through a similar process as a phoenix does. He was reborn in a sense. I think all of this was communicated well in the story, and it fit in perfectly to end the story by calling back to the phoenix and Ammon. Overall I think this story was great and I hope to read more from you in the future!
Hi sam, i read your introduction and your first story and i want to start by saying that your use of dialogue is great. by having the characters all talk to one another you can really get an idea of their different personalities and how they are handling the Greece situation. I really like your site so far, it is easy to navigate and the pictures you used are great for the story. My one suggestion is that in the introduction when poseidon comes for zeus in egypt it would be nice to know a little more information about what is going on in Greece. Has his father always been a villian? I also didnt understand what all the bird taught him and is this bird some sort of god or does it have supernatural powers? some more background information may help a little and would provide more clarity. Overall your story is great and i really enjoyed reading it. Great job!
Hello Sam! Your cover photo is stunning and works very well with the rest of your layout elements (fonts and color choices). The way that you have arranged your page makes it easy to navigate and to find whatever you would need to find. Having the story, then the authors note, then breaking it up with and image, which kind of signals that everything that is "important" or "vital" is over, and then you bring in your sources. This makes it very easy to figure out where I was in the reading process, which to me is always great. Your stories are very well written, the way that you use dialog and descriptions make the reader feel very immersed in your story telling.
Hi Sam! I read your introduction, and I'm very intrigued. On the one hand, you have Zeus characterized very differently than he normally is. Usually, he's this all-powerful, haughty, awe-inspiring guy, and everyone is always falling at his feet. I always wondered what it might be like to see the people of Greece get fed up with his rape-y shenanigans, even though I know that wasn't the reason he got kicked out in your story. Your crossover with Egypt is really interesting also. I like where you're headed with the "reformed" Zeus. My only note would be to maybe combine some of your paragraphs, because it seems you have spaces between continuous ideas, and it might be easier for your reader to concentrate on you story progression that way. All in all, good job!
Hey Sam, You did a great job with this first story. I really enjoyed reading it and the idea that Zeus, who is always doing something horrible in the stories that I have read about him, is learning to be a better god. As for feedback I just have a couple points. First off, I noticed a couple instances, including the title, of you using “Zeus’” to indicate ownership. When you use – s’ – it indicates plurality as well as possession. So, you are saying that is the story of multiple people named Zeus. I believe it should be “Zeus’s Transformation,” but you may want to ask Laura about that. I could be wrong. Second in the beginning it seems like Zeus isn’t all that upset about having to leave, which from the end of the story doesn’t seem to be true, so you may want to rework the first part a bit to see if you can find a way to convey Zeus’s feelings a little bit more clearly. Thanks really it though for your first story. As for the second story, great job describing the battle! I could really form a good mental image of it in my head and the photo you chose as an illustration was helpful as well. For your final story, I see that the phoenix connects the three stories together, but it was confusing at first. I think that it would be a good idea to include something in the first paragraph that helps the reader transition from the first two stories to this one. Thanks all I have! -Cat
I loved how you tied together multiple cultures and tales for this storybook. I've always enjoyed both Egyptian and Greek mythology, and getting to see them come together like this made me pretty happy. I also loved that Zeus learned and changed. One of his biggest perceived faults is the inability to learn, so seeing that change here along with an apology for past mistakes was pretty refreshing.
Ok! I didn't realize the theme of rebirth until just now. I guess the name should've given it away, but I thought it was all about Zeus. I'm a little confused why the introduction introduces only one of your tales instead of all of them? I like that all of your tales involve a phoenix as well as the same set of gods, but I wasn't expecting that when I started reading the intro. One other question, why is your story in present tense? Is it a stylistic choice? The transitions between present and past were a bit confusing and hard for me to follow.
Overall, I really enjoyed your story choices as well as the changes you made to the tales. Your explanation for the changes of the phoenix between cultures was really interesting, and I liked the consistency of the themes. Well done.
I thought that your introduction was really enticing! You immediately grasp the reader's attention right at the beginning. I like the conflict that you have created for Zeus, especially the internal conflict of not wanting to face Greece after. One thing that I would have liked to know a little more about is what Zeus does to Tartarus that prevents the Titans from escaping again. Even just adding one line about that would help the reader better understand what happened. However, I really like the detail you give about the Phoenix and how you tied that into a symbol of Zeus' rebirth. In the "Redemption," I like how you incorporated the Phoenix in Leonidas' dreams. It is interesting to see Leonidas struggle through some of the same feelings that Zeus went through. I was a little confused because I was not sure how anyone could sleep with the guilt that was weighing over Leonidas, but that is not to say that stress cannot send one into a deep sleep. Overall, this is a great project, well done! :)
Hey Sam! I was really excited to read a project that centered around the idea of the phoenix! I first heard about that creature from the Harry Potter series and I was hoping to learn more by reading your project which I definitely did. I like how you brought us back to where the possible origins of the legend of the phoenix came from. I had never heard of its connections to Egypt so I found that particularly fascinating. A lot of times I find myself suggesting to someone to add more images to their stories but you did a great job of providing an image with most of the scene changes and especially in the "Redemption" story I liked how you used an image to show the way Leonidas traveled. If I were to make a suggestion I think the beginning of the Redemption story might benefit from a short narration providing a little background to what was going on. Other than that I thought it was great that you were able to connect the legend of the phoenix to all of these different Gods and heroes of legend. You've got a great project here, excellent writing!
Hey Sam! I enjoyed reading your introduction. I think it was a very good way of introducing the Phoenix for your Storybook project. The crossover between Egypt and Greece is very interesting and creative!
ReplyDeleteHow “old” is Zeus in this story? You mention in the author’s note that he may be pretty early in his leadership of the Olympians, and I think that would be a great detail to include early in your story to provide a reason why Greece would cast him out.
I also wonder if you can make the months-long time gap where Zeus is in Egypt feel less quick. It was a bit jolting for Poseidon to suddenly appear. Maybe you can spend a paragraph describing some of the things Zeus learns and does while he’s in Egypt before Poseidon comes.
I’m really excited to see what other stories you tell with the Phoenix! Keep up the good work!
This was a great introduction! I really enjoyed the way that you connected Greek and Egyptian mythology. I think that it is very clever and creative. Finding the phoenix/Bennu as the avenue to connect the two mythology stories is really neat! I like the way that you made the emotions be known of the characters in the story. The description that you used adds a lot to the story. As a reader, I am able to picture exactly what you are writing due to the descriptions that you included. At the beginning of your story, Zeus is kicked out of Greece. What exactly did Zeus do? What if you added a brief history of all of the bad things that Zeus has done to Greece? This would create a better understand right from the beginning of why the Greeks wanted to kick out their ruler. Adding this would also show how desperate the people are for Zeus to come back towards the end of the story. It all ties in together! Also, what if you tried to expand the paragraphs some? I know that there is a lot of dialogue throughout the story, but creating larger paragraphs will make the story not feel as choppy. I look forward to reading more of your stories this semester!
ReplyDeleteHello there Sam! You really found a way to pack your story with a punch right off the bat. I love a good Greek story that adds in a lot of mythological lore based creatures. The Author's Notes also helped me to understand where you were coming from at the beginning of the introduction. I was wondering what Zeus did to cause all of the people of Greece to attempt to cast him out. Was it something that just he did or did all the gods take part? Was he on mortal grounds speaking with everyone? Did they pray to him to leave and he left without them knowing or realizing it? You could really liven up the story and provide deeper drama if you hit the potential questions in the beginning! I also appreciate the large amounts of dialogue to break up the characters as you move forward. Everyone has their own minds and you're left to guess as the reader on what's going to happen next. I can't wait to read more from you!
ReplyDeleteHey Sammie! I really liked the way that you intertwined both Greek and Egyptian Mythology. Rather than keeping them separate, you let Zeus, Poseidon, Ammon, and Bennu all coexist together, which, in my personal opinion, opens the door to a lot of possibilities. I also really enjoyed the fact that this story was a sort of "redemption story" for Zeus. He is usually hailed as the leader of the gods, but at the same time, he is also a very violent god. It's interesting to implement the Egyptian Bennu and transition it to the idea of the Greek Phoenix. I think a good idea would be to move the images somewhere so that it doesn't distract away from the flow of the story. I also like that the images are embedded inside the story, so that there's more imagery, so maybe making the images smaller would be a viable option. I'm excited to see what happens next in the story.
ReplyDeleteHi Sam!
ReplyDeleteGreat introduction! I thought this was a great setup for your stories. In my opinion it may have been a little long for an introduction. It felt more like a story itself. If possible I would try to cut out any unnecessary information.
I agree with Nathaniel that the pictures do mess with the flow a little bit. Maybe make them smaller or add them to the side versus right in the middle. I almost thought the story was over after the first image because it seemed like an ending image.
I liked that Zeus had a different story in this scenario and that he was not the almighty god zeus. I also liked that you combined Greek and Egyptian! It makes stories that many of us have read before very different and exciting!
I am excited to see how Zeus handles this situation! Great job on your story so far!
Hi Sam!
ReplyDeleteYour storybook idea is so unique. What a great idea to combine the Greek and Egyptian mythology like that. I have never seen those two mythologies combined before. In your introduction maybe go into more detail about why they have decided to kick Zeus out of Greece. It must have been really bad for the people to rise up against a god. Also, I really liked the plot about Zeus learning from Ammon and the Bennu. But we didn’t get to see very much of his journey. It might be interesting to see how Zeus changes from someone who gets kicked out of a country to someone who saves that country. I thought the pictures you chose for the Battle for Greece worked very well. Writing action scenes, especially fight scenes, can be really challenging. However, I thought you wrote the fight scenes very well. I really enjoyed your storybook so far, and I can’t wait to see where it goes.
Hello Sam!
ReplyDeleteYour introduction and your first story the " The Battler for Greece" is a great start to your project page! Both of these stories are easy to read and interesting. I do not have much knowledge of Egyptian Mythology but you definitely made me interested in learning more about it. In your introduction, I was able to feel and picture the anger Zesus felt towards Cronus and his father. I also think more people in our class should adapt to what you did in your authors note for, "The Battle for Greece". You put definitions in the authors note! That is a great idea, especially if the audience is not completely familiar with the topic being discussed. I disagree with the comments above. When it comes to the placement of the pictures. I think it helps create a visual along the way of the story. It is definitely a preference but I do not think you should change that technique. Good job on the profile you have created so far.
Hello Sam, I thought your story “Tales of the Phoenix” was really great! I have always loved reading about Greek mythology and different variants of it, so when I got to read your story I was really excited. I thought that the way you described the fight between Zeus and Cronus was really great. The detail that you put into it really drew me in and made me connected to the story. I thought it was really cool how you had Zeus learn from the phoenix about being reborn and coming back stronger than before. It was a really cool way to introduce the phoenix. For your portfolio, I think that it is set up rally well with great pictures and explanations. The one thing that I would suggest is to add a link to the comment wall in your cover page and in each story page that way people can go directly to it and comment about your stories. Overall I thought your story was great, keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteHey Sam! I like how you chose to write about Greek mythology. Your introduction does a good job of introducing what your storybook is about without giving away too much. The picture on your first story is great! It is very bold. Your dialogue is written well too, it gives the character personalities and adds life to the story. That has always been the hardest part about story writing for me. The only thing I would change is maybe have different header photos for each page to change it up a little bit. Either way your story book is looking really great.
ReplyDeleteHi Sam, I really enjoyed reading your story The Battle for Greece. It is an action-packed story that effortlessly keeps the reader’s attention. I think you story is written well and flows very smoothly. I especially like how you have a third person narrator but you also include direct quotes from the characters. I like this dynamic! I also like how it clearly ties into and relates to your introduction. I think the picture you chose for this story is spot on! I think adding the phoenix to your story was a great idea. The analogy between Zeus and the Phoenix is great. Also, your author’s note is extremely helpful. I think you do a great job of explaining (and accomplishing) your goals for this story. Additionally, the second paragraph of the author’s note provides a great summary of the history behind this story. As someone who is not as familiar with Greek mythology, this helped immensely being able to read about the back story. Great job!
ReplyDeleteHi Sam! I read the story The Battle for Greece from your storybook. The story was very engaging and I enjoyed reading it. I particularly liked how you wrote the fight scene between Zeus and Cronus. You included a good amount of detail in it, which made it easy for me to visualize the fight while reading. I think the image you used for the story was also very helpful in giving a starting place for what to imagine the fight scene looking like. I liked the idea relating to the phoenix that was expressed further in this story, carrying on from the information provided in your storybook’s Introduction. It was very easy to tell that Zeus was made out to be going through a similar process as a phoenix does. He was reborn in a sense. I think all of this was communicated well in the story, and it fit in perfectly to end the story by calling back to the phoenix and Ammon. Overall I think this story was great and I hope to read more from you in the future!
ReplyDeleteHi sam, i read your introduction and your first story and i want to start by saying that your use of dialogue is great. by having the characters all talk to one another you can really get an idea of their different personalities and how they are handling the Greece situation. I really like your site so far, it is easy to navigate and the pictures you used are great for the story. My one suggestion is that in the introduction when poseidon comes for zeus in egypt it would be nice to know a little more information about what is going on in Greece. Has his father always been a villian? I also didnt understand what all the bird taught him and is this bird some sort of god or does it have supernatural powers? some more background information may help a little and would provide more clarity. Overall your story is great and i really enjoyed reading it. Great job!
ReplyDeleteHello Sam! Your cover photo is stunning and works very well with the rest of your layout elements (fonts and color choices). The way that you have arranged your page makes it easy to navigate and to find whatever you would need to find. Having the story, then the authors note, then breaking it up with and image, which kind of signals that everything that is "important" or "vital" is over, and then you bring in your sources. This makes it very easy to figure out where I was in the reading process, which to me is always great. Your stories are very well written, the way that you use dialog and descriptions make the reader feel very immersed in your story telling.
ReplyDelete- Anna Margret
Hi Sam! I read your introduction, and I'm very intrigued. On the one hand, you have Zeus characterized very differently than he normally is. Usually, he's this all-powerful, haughty, awe-inspiring guy, and everyone is always falling at his feet. I always wondered what it might be like to see the people of Greece get fed up with his rape-y shenanigans, even though I know that wasn't the reason he got kicked out in your story. Your crossover with Egypt is really interesting also. I like where you're headed with the "reformed" Zeus. My only note would be to maybe combine some of your paragraphs, because it seems you have spaces between continuous ideas, and it might be easier for your reader to concentrate on you story progression that way. All in all, good job!
ReplyDeleteHey Sam,
ReplyDeleteYou did a great job with this first story. I really enjoyed reading it and the idea that Zeus, who is always doing something horrible in the stories that I have read about him, is learning to be a better god. As for feedback I just have a couple points. First off, I noticed a couple instances, including the title, of you using “Zeus’” to indicate ownership. When you use – s’ – it indicates plurality as well as possession. So, you are saying that is the story of multiple people named Zeus. I believe it should be “Zeus’s Transformation,” but you may want to ask Laura about that. I could be wrong.
Second in the beginning it seems like Zeus isn’t all that upset about having to leave, which from the end of the story doesn’t seem to be true, so you may want to rework the first part a bit to see if you can find a way to convey Zeus’s feelings a little bit more clearly.
Thanks really it though for your first story.
As for the second story, great job describing the battle! I could really form a good mental image of it in my head and the photo you chose as an illustration was helpful as well.
For your final story, I see that the phoenix connects the three stories together, but it was confusing at first. I think that it would be a good idea to include something in the first paragraph that helps the reader transition from the first two stories to this one.
Thanks all I have!
-Cat
Hi Sam!
ReplyDeleteI loved how you tied together multiple cultures and tales for this storybook. I've always enjoyed both Egyptian and Greek mythology, and getting to see them come together like this made me pretty happy. I also loved that Zeus learned and changed. One of his biggest perceived faults is the inability to learn, so seeing that change here along with an apology for past mistakes was pretty refreshing.
Ok! I didn't realize the theme of rebirth until just now. I guess the name should've given it away, but I thought it was all about Zeus. I'm a little confused why the introduction introduces only one of your tales instead of all of them? I like that all of your tales involve a phoenix as well as the same set of gods, but I wasn't expecting that when I started reading the intro. One other question, why is your story in present tense? Is it a stylistic choice? The transitions between present and past were a bit confusing and hard for me to follow.
Overall, I really enjoyed your story choices as well as the changes you made to the tales. Your explanation for the changes of the phoenix between cultures was really interesting, and I liked the consistency of the themes. Well done.
Hello Sam,
ReplyDeleteI thought that your introduction was really enticing! You immediately grasp the reader's attention right at the beginning. I like the conflict that you have created for Zeus, especially the internal conflict of not wanting to face Greece after. One thing that I would have liked to know a little more about is what Zeus does to Tartarus that prevents the Titans from escaping again. Even just adding one line about that would help the reader better understand what happened. However, I really like the detail you give about the Phoenix and how you tied that into a symbol of Zeus' rebirth. In the "Redemption," I like how you incorporated the Phoenix in Leonidas' dreams. It is interesting to see Leonidas struggle through some of the same feelings that Zeus went through. I was a little confused because I was not sure how anyone could sleep with the guilt that was weighing over Leonidas, but that is not to say that stress cannot send one into a deep sleep. Overall, this is a great project, well done! :)
Hey Sam!
ReplyDeleteI was really excited to read a project that centered around the idea of the phoenix! I first heard about that creature from the Harry Potter series and I was hoping to learn more by reading your project which I definitely did. I like how you brought us back to where the possible origins of the legend of the phoenix came from. I had never heard of its connections to Egypt so I found that particularly fascinating. A lot of times I find myself suggesting to someone to add more images to their stories but you did a great job of providing an image with most of the scene changes and especially in the "Redemption" story I liked how you used an image to show the way Leonidas traveled. If I were to make a suggestion I think the beginning of the Redemption story might benefit from a short narration providing a little background to what was going on. Other than that I thought it was great that you were able to connect the legend of the phoenix to all of these different Gods and heroes of legend. You've got a great project here, excellent writing!